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Aug. 29th, 2004 @ 01:02 pm
Long sentences are what I do. Whenever I cut them to pieces I don't feel good about them, so I've decided to use the convenient 'It's necessary for setting the style!' argument, which helps me well in these cases.
tes-ty, adj. tes-ti-er, tes-ti-est, adv. testily
Irritated, impatient, or exasperated; peevish.
I think that goes with Poll's character pretty damn well, actually.
|Date:||August 30th, 2004 08:02 am (UTC)|| |
|(Link)|I think that goes with Poll's character pretty damn well, actually.
After I had already looked up that word myself, I agreed. That wasn't my point.
My point was how adding the way others fainted would show a direct contrast between them and Poll. Instead of always saying there's a contrast.
But I'm just saying my thoughts. Every writer has the right to say: "bollocks to you all!" and do whatever the hell (s)he wants.
*points downwards to the other comment she made*
And anyway, the ending was a definite Poll POV. She had her eyes closed. What do you think she is, an alien?!
|Date:||August 30th, 2004 08:10 am (UTC)|| |
|(Link)|*points downwards to the other comment she made*
You mean the comment about lj not showing comments? *confused*
When I read it I thought: "Hmm...this is an opportunity to show the differences" and that's basically what I said. It wasn't "Oh, you should do this and this and...wait let me just show you my version." It wasn't very well-thought.
And yes, she had her eyes closed, but you still wrote "If she'd been able to see".
Also, I know that you mean it in the 'show the differences' way -- I just enjoy arguing about things way too much. ;) (Once scared the fuck out of Arnoud, I did, with that)
|Date:||August 30th, 2004 10:03 am (UTC)|| |
Ah yes, Arnoud. He's a good victim. ^_^
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